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In recent years, the number of juvenile delinquents has been increasing dramatically, which is a one of the serious social issues (in these days). This phenomenon has several reasons by homes or schools??좀더 설명을 해주셔야 할 것 같아요. In this essay, I will discuss generating the reasons of juvenile delinquents and suggest some resolutions to the problems.
To begin with, the creating causes of juvenile delinquents are associated with home and schools (이문장은 서론에 어울리는 것 같습니다^^). Firstly, today, the divorce rate has been rising, which affects their children’s mental health negatively because they cannot receive appropriate rearing/support by their parents. It could lead them to put temptations such as->be tempted to drug-abuse or committing a crime. Secondly, they always should study harder in order to enter better university. Thus, they easily get pressured from competition. In order to release their stress, they often commit crime. Lastly, in our society, since the programs lack for children->since there are lack of programs for children, they reject society order to entertain exclusively.
Nevertheless, we can suggest several resolutions of juvenile delinquents. Most of all, parents should pay more attention to control children’s negative action. Paying attention, parents could prevent them to become ->becoming criminals. What is more, schools and governments should introduce the after school programs for their students. If the programs were get encouraged, the children could enjoy their free time with->in healthy methods. This will contribute to reducing->reducing the rate of juvenile delinquents.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above, despite of increasing of juvenile delinquents increase, we can ban their climes by parent’s attention and introducing after school programs. Therefore, we should make efforts to decline the number of young criminals though through these resolutions. |