Having experienced and qualified politicians is crucial to both the government and the public. Some people contend that young people should not be assigned to executive positions in the government, while others argue the opposite. This essay will outline both perspectives and conclude that the participation of the young generation in politics cuts both ways.
To look at the positive sides, having young people in key positions in the government can be a fresh drive to overcome a difficulty and remedy situations. Indeed, young generations have lateral thinking skills and their creativity will help not only to solve problems but also to produce various novel ideas which can benefit society. Moreover, needless to say, the future is their paths where young generations will walk on. In other words, the opportunities to discuss the present issues and make a decision for a better future should be provided to young people.
On the other hand, there will be adverse effects from allowing young people to have influential positions in the government. First and foremost, politics should not be subjective and reversed. However, since the youth are generally high-spirited, their immaturity can cause unexpected situations in significant events. Secondly, people often believe that the young lacks experience and wisdom because they have lived a short period of life of the short period of life compared to the elders. Therefore, it will be difficult to demand the respect of the public even if although young generations are able to offer a novel solution for society.
To recapitulate, some people assert that young people will play a vital role with creativity and tenacity, while others claim that they are too impressionable to occupy key roles in the government. I opine that it has both benefits and drawbacks. (이럴 경우 위의 단순 요약에 지나지 않아서...사실 6점 정도에는 크게 상관이 없지만 7~8 점에는 가급적이면 조금 더 '내 의견이' 정확하게 드러나도록 적어주시는 게 좋긴 합니다.)
지난 시험에서 6.5, 7점 받고 현재 7.5 목표하고 있습니다. 말씀해주신 것처럼 앞으로는 TASK 1도 더 연습해 보려고 합니다. 조언 감사드립니다 :)
총평: (6/7/8/7) 7.0
네 향이님 task 1도 절대 소홀히하지 마시고, task 2에서는 어차피 향이님의 경우 문법/어휘는 잘 갖춰져있으니까 내용 관련해서 마지막 턱을 넘는 것이 관건이 될 겁니다. 이를 위해 모범답안을 철저히 분석해주시고 (검증된 것에 한해), 최대한 문장들이 암기된 느낌이 나지 않도록 수정하는 작업도 해주시면 됩니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)