재첨삭부탁합니다 좀 수정해봤어요 지적해주신부분 (그리고 귀한시간 너무 감사드립니다!!꾸벅)
With a great developmet of socety and economy, number of people are having pets increased with considerable financial inverstment. However, others dissent against it. This essay will discuss both sides of cons and pros with specific examples.
On the one hand, human are always priority and foremost than pets. There are a lot of people who are suffed from starvation seriously. For example, number of developing countries have this phenomenon greater compared to deveopled countries. They really need help and subsidize from rich countries now. Nevertheless, some people are enjoying to purchase a lot of animal accessories with luxuries a lot. Pets are always cared and feeded by human physically and psychologically. If human does not assist them, they will confront with difficult phnomenon such as health care, food nourishment. There fore, when human are healthier and stronger than animals, they can be guarded appropriately from human.
On the other hand, Animals are important as much as human beings. People have received assistance from animals greatly in broad areas such as farms,disabled people, medical researchs. For example, some dogs help blind people to find their way. Moreover, elderly people often feel lonely but pets mitigate the problms with protection house against robber. Therefore,pets also deserve compensation from human financially and emotionally.
In conclusion, I believe that when people reduced extravagance to their pets with luxuries immoderately, we can also assist poor people togeter, it might lead our creatures to the more better way.