■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Discuss advantages and disadvantages of raising a pet in modern society. | |
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▶ Your Answer : From the past time, people and animals live together. People give animals a place for staying to animals,to stay, while animals give a loyalty to people. These days, a lot of people raise a pet. As raising a pet, however, there are some advantages and disadvantages.
First of all advantages is raising a pet will be a good education to children. Accroding to a the report, playing with a pet makes friendship and cooperation to children. Second, it is helpful not only young people but also old people, bacause,because most old people fell feel lonely so a pet can be a friend and family to them who lived in solitude. Finally, people will get love and friendship to a pet. The These are the reasons why humans have an interaction with animals.
On the other hand, there are three disadvantages. First is conflict. People who love a pet and who dislike a pet have a lot of conflict. For example, some people can't sleep when a pet dog bark at apartment. Also, one of the some people don't clean their pet's excretions. Second, the proportion of abandoned pets grow up. As rate of raising a pet increases, people who are tired of their pets give up them easily, because they can buy a new pet again. Last, the birthrate will decrease because of women who want to a pet than a baby. Therefore, raising a pet can cause society social problems.
Consequently, raising a pet become a one of the modern society's custom. Then, all of the people will make a great environment by adding the advantages and supplementing the disadvantages.
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