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People have different views about whether team sports are useful for children to achieve success in their career or not. I personally believe that sports which are played in a group is beneficial for children’s career in the future.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people insist that team sports are not important for kids to complete their job successfully. First of all, team sports may cause a sense of too much competition for children. By doing some team sports, children can get an admire to always outdo competitors. When children who are too competitive grow up, they will be adults who cannot interact well with colleagues. This aspect is an obstacle to be succeed in the workplace. Furthermore, working is not that simple as much as doing sports. When we do sports, we (여기는 1인칭이 반드시 필요한 상황이 아니므로 수정해주세요~) just need to follow the rules and make scores to win, however, in the workplace, there are a lot of situations which are unexpected and out of control. (문단의 중간까지는 팀스포츠의 단점에 대해 잘 설명해주시다가 갑자기 후반부로 오면서 팀스포츠에 관한 내용은 찾을 수 없고 그저 스포츠 자체와 일하는 것을 비교하고 있으므로 수정해주셔야 합니다.)
On the other hand, others believe that team sports are a powerful means for children in terms of their career. Firstly, teenagers can learn how to cooperate with other companies. In the team sports, it is not important whether there are talented individuals or not. The important thing is a harmony. All people have their own role, and when each member of the team has to completes their job, winning is possible. A sense of collaborations is very important as all workers are expected to work in teams in the workplace. Another reason is that children can be patient because they need to follow the rules. In addition, they need to be patient when other co-workers do some behaviours which are not understandable. Patience is also necessary to work as adults are expected to follow instructions given by supervisors. (여기도 갑자기 흐름에서 벗어나고 있습니다. 무조건 팀스포츠에서 벗어나지 않도록 해주세요.)
In conclusion, it seems to me that children can be great adults in their work by doing team sports even though (여러 번 드리는 말씀인데, 이게 왜 성립하는지를 꼭 말씀해주셔야 합니다.) there are few negative aspect of team sports. |