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It is often said
that the connection between parents and children are is not as strongly bounded as it used to be, but I
still believe that we should place most value on parents and children’s relationship. In this essay I
will discuss factors that affect the relationship
and give answers to solve these problems.
It is clear that
there are a couple of causes that have
influenced on the connection of parents and children. The number of
growing double income families would be the first reason. Parents do not
have enough time to spend with their children,
but instead they should make sufficient money due to an increased cost
of living. The later other reason is that
a child is exposed to a variety of external influences such as computer
games, internet surfing, and their peer groups. For instance,
children are often more likely to mingle with their friends, spending their
time on the virtual and physical acvitivities activities like games and sports at home or
school. Although their children look to sharing their life and experiences
with their parents, they are away from them to
keep up with working. (이 문장은 문단 초반에 넣으시는 게 더 자연스럽습니다)
However, the good
news is that there are various steps to tackle these problems.
First of all, governments should make an accurate policy to
offer families to enjoy the quality of life together, supporting
parents through reorganized childcare
system from welfare budget, and so it would release their financial
burden. They may also be allowed to have a plenty of time spent
with their children. Secondly, parents are holding another key to solve
the issue. This is because a healthy parent-child relationship is the most
valuable factor. By encouraging children to associate with their family, they can find a precious affection from their parents so
they can learn to obey law and regulations as a
result. Parents can also help them feel sense
of values to abide by rules, therefore, a child is less likely to be a
sociopath later in later life. (사유들이 너무 극단적입니다)
For these reasons
mentioned above, I would believe that a closer health parents-children relationship is much worththan any
other relationship crucial for a child
to well-behave and governments as well as
parents should make an effort to build such strong bond connections.
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