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Some people believe that increasing the
cost of petrol is the best method to solve growing traffic and pollution
problems. According to the opinions, I personally disagree with the opinion above this issue
because public transportation system and campaigns play an a more important role in
solving the problems. To begin with, I think that increasing the
price of petrol cannot solve the problems. Although Even if the government increases
the price of petrol, most of the people would still need to use the petrol. For example,
many experts say that the government of Korea increased the price of rice. But many
people bought the product. To be specific, some people say that the price of
petrol is a very crucial factor for some jobs like taxi drivers. It is obvious
that some jobs are threated y increasing the cost of petrol. (특정 직업이 위협을 받으면, 결과적으로는 기름 사용량은 줄어들기 때문에 바로 뒤에서 하고자 하는 말과 충돌하게 됩니다. 문단 전반적으로 통일성을 키워주세요~) As a result, this
solution does not help people to reduce growing traffic and pollution problems. I think that developing public transportation
system and implementing useful campaigns have positive effects on society
because these activities allow people to solve solving growing traffic and pollution
problems, compared to increasing the cost of petrol. First of all, the
government should build well-organized public transportation system. When many
people use the buses and subways more often, traffic jam reduce naturally. Also,
people do not use their own cars. This activity decreases pollution problems. As
a result, the government has to develop public transportation system. Moreover,
the government makes a campaign in order to show the public. Seeing the
campaign helps citizens to acknowledge serious problems. (~해야 한다의 어조 말고, ~하면 ~~한 효과가 있을 것이다와 같이 적어주세요!) In conclusion, I personally disagree with
this opinion (이게 무엇을 지칭하는 것인지에 대해 다시 한번 상기시켜주세요. 핵심에 대한 꾸준한 상기는 매우 중요합니다.), and also the governments have to develop well-organized public
transport.
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