문제: Art and music classes should not to be mandatory at school.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is a common belief that art and music classes is not necessary in education at school.
However, I firmly believe that art and music classes should be mandatory class for students. This is because these can foster creativity and provide opportunities for students to relieve stress.
To begin with, Music and art can be help foster creativity of students. also, creativity is important to our whole lives. Variety activities in art and music classes would be make them try to create new something they wants and to understand about some works or music themselves with their own ways.
For instance, Opportunities that students can experience many paintings or statues or music is provided by school with expert educators. also, students would share their feeling and thinking with peers. through these time their creativity can improve.
On top of that, art and music classes give students opportunities to relieve stress. therefore students can be taught control their feeling and stress. It is important to control the stress to not only students, but everybody. As school focus on music and art courses, students should learn ways of stress control and it works for whole life. Soft melody music such as classic enable many people to relax but it is kind of distress way. Some people would be happy with listening popular music. Regardless of kind of music or arts, it is important to find suitable ways through education at school.
To sum up, art and music make it possible to foster creativity and to ease stress and this role should be taken school as including these classes in mandatory subjects.
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