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Some people said that all students of university has to should study what they want. Other people think that they should only learn subjects which can be helpful in their future, such as science and technology. For instance, the subjects have something to do with science and technology. I will discuss both these views in addition to write my writing my own opinion.
Some people believe that it is important that the for students to major in what they want study the majors whatever they want. This is because when they are given a choice, they get more involved and study harder Because the students get involved and study harder without by being forced. Thus, they can get great better grades at university. For example, when I was a student, I was interested in studying a cook subject cooking. So, I had always had good grades and the cook became my job at this moment. (문장을 and but so 로 시작하지 말아주세요~)
On the other hand, some people argue that the student of university students should only learn about subjects which will actually be used in the future. According to a survey conducted by Seoul National University, 30 percent of jobs will disappear in the next decades. Therefore, the useful occupation for the future plays a key role for the students. (이게 왜 성립하는 건가요? 글만 봐서는 모르겠으므로, 구체적인 설명을 동반해주세요~) Also, it guarantees that they can get a job, even when they get old.
In conclusion, some people insist that learning of majors, which student want, help the students to get deeper range of knowledge. While others think that the students should only entitle them to study the useful subject for their future life. As far as I am concerned, the students of university should be allowed to study the subject whatever they want with their educational rights. (빨간색 지워진 부분은 이미 서론에서 그 역할을 수행하고 있는 문장이 있습니다. 그러므로 파란 부분을 보충하는데에 더 집중해주세요~)
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