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It is often argued that the increasing trend of buying e-books bring about the decreasing trend of buying paper books these days. Some people think that this trend is a good step forward. There are both merits and demerits of this trend, and it is my belief that the advantages certainly override its disadvantages. (여기는 논제가 요구하는 사항과 들어맞지 않습니다. 자세한 건 총평을 참고해주세요.)
There is a negative aspect that lots of people read a variety of books to use by (전가기기를 사용하려고 책을 읽는다는 의미가 되었기 때문에 바꿔드렸습니다.) their own electronic device in the present. When some people read paper books in some places like library, room and cafe, they are immersed in the story of that book well. (이 문장은 댓글 한번 주셔야 할 것 같습니다. 의미는 잘 이해했는데, 앞 뒤 맥락과 어떤 식으로 연결되는지 파악할 수가 없네요.) If some people use their own phone in order to read a book, the process of reading may be disturbed due to messages from their acquaintances they could respond their message from their acquaintances and they would be able to do different activity such as watching videos on Youtube and playing online games. Consequently, they would not be able to concentrate on the story of the book while reading.
However, the increasing trend of buying many e-books nowadays has several positive aspects. One of the main benefits is that people especially the elderly can expand the written words in the book so that they that they can read more comfortably want to read more comfortable. Lots of e-books have word expansion function for elderly, therefore, old people who want to read books but they would not be able to read small written words could read many books whatever they want. (앞에서 했던 말을 의미없이 반복하고 있을 뿐입니다.) Another main benefit is that using electronic devices in order to read a variety of book is convenient to because the devices are being portable in anywhere. For instance, I want to read a book while I go to the school in a subway. If there was no e-book at that time, I would bring books which weight heavy in my bag. However, there is a good function to use my own phone to read a book these days, I would not bring any heavy stuff in order to read a favorite book. (과거 쪽으로 서술해주세요~)
While there is an disadvantage of reading e-books, however, there are two advantages that elderly people can read books more comfortable and people would bring their own phone which weights light to read books because of good portability. As a result, benefits of this trend should be carefully viewed. (결론은 다시 작성해주셔야 하는데, 자세한 건 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
Q : 제 의견과 반대되는 관점에서 근거를 하나만 써도 감점이 안되는지 궁금합니다 ^^
A: 논제에 따라 다릅니다! 이 논제는 장단점만을 서술하라고 하고 있고, 글쓴이님의 의견은 전혀 묻고 있지 않기 때문에 그냥 근거의 수에 관계없이 장단점을 모두 세밀하게 서술해주시면 돼요 :)
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