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There are thousands of people who run small
businesses rather than working for well-organized companies in this era of modernization.
The reason is that people have different identities to earn money, and they
seek the best way to achieve their satisfaction. However, most of them should
undoubtedly make high-risk decisions, which is likely to be frustrating in
finance.
People nowadays are inclined to earn a lot
of money by running their businesses rather than working for other people. They
are exposed to enormous stories of eminent people who have already succeeded
and feel they can do such things. Also, some people cannot get used to the
atmosphere of the hierarchy of companies and find it challenging to gain a
sense of achievement and satisfaction. For these reasons, many people are
seeking to be self-employed and do work for themselves. -> 이런 식으로 예시 없이 가시면 됩니다. 아주 좋아요. 다른 글들도 이런 느낌으로 가시면 돼요.
However, self-employed Self-employed people tend to suffer from
financial problems. To be specific, most of them loan money from banks since it requires they should have a small budget to establish a business. They ought to pay back
those finance with different interests, which has low cost-effectiveness. My
grandfather has a small company which where sells groceries, and I heard he had
suffered from financial problems when he first runs that business. (반면에 이런 예시는 아무런 의미가 없고요.) Thus, it is
manifest that most people who choose to be self-employed are prone to have a
financial crisis.
In conclusion, against the disadvantage
that people are suffering from money, the prospect of self-employed people will
increase since they are desire to earn a lot of money.
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