The line graph shows the amounts of different modes of goods transported by different modes which is road, water, rail and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.
It is obvious that the quantities of goods traveled through road were the highest the most goods throughout the whole periods. Water and rail were similar from 1974 to 1978 but the difference had been larger from 1978. Pipeline slowly showed had the upward trend slowly.
Even though road experienced a dicrease in 1982 and 1994, it gradually increased and peaked at under 100 million tones in 2002. In 1974 and 1978, water and rail were 40 million tones similarly but, while water went up, rail went down from 1982. The gab was the biggest most in 1986 and 1994. In spite of the upward trend, pipeline remained as under 20 million tones from 1974 to 1994. Since then, it was above 20 million tones until 2002.
총평: (5/6/6/5) 5.5
지금 제일 중요한 것은 주어를 정확하게 갖추는 것입니다. 표에서 증가하는 것은 각 항목을 통해 운반된 goods의 무게이지, 각 항목 자체가 증가하지는 않아요. 제가 두 번째 문단의 첫 문장말고는 주어 문제가 있는 모든 문장들을 그대로 두었으니까, 꼭 직접 수정해보세요! 이렇게 해야 실력이 늡니다. (두/세 번째 문단 중 The gap~로 시작하는 문장을 제외하고는 모두 주어 문제가 있습니다.)
수고하셨습니다 :)