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The increase in the number of people who are obese because of over-consumption of sugar is a serious problem which we are faced with in modern society. It is serious problem which we are faced in modern society , the population of obesity has been increasing because of over consuming of sugar. Many people usually take a lot of sugar in a day such as drinks, sauce. Sometimes we don’t (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) know that food which contain a lot of sugar and then we take it. that is why this problems are threaten out healthy This is why this problem is threatening our health thus, many government trying to decrease the consumption of sugar consume rate.
The government has have many responsibility of controlling the healthy problem we have, otherwise it is hard to prevent consume harmful stuff such as sugar, tabaco etc. For example, in the past the USA government suggested smoking the cigarette and then many people were smoking the cigarette. after (여기 포함, 글 내내 대문자로 시작해야할 단어는 소문자 시작되고 있고 소문자 시작되어야 할 단어는 대문자 시작되고 있습니다. 글을 다시 한번 읽어보시고 싹 다 수정해주세요!) that they had high death rate by smoking. It shows the government effects on many citizens. Thus, they will be able to control to take harmful ingredient by making the rules. It is serious to take high levels of sugar these-days, Many experts say that sugar is one of the most harmful ingredients for us. Sugar can destroy to our immune system and make us gain weight making us fatter and addicted. It is enough reason to prevent the consumption of to take sugar.
On the other hand, some people say that It is too much control for foods, There are more harmful ingredients than sugar thus, it is unnecessary for the government to take control of the intake of sugar to control taking sugar by government. If they introduced special taxes, then it would be bad for the food industry. (여기서 엔터 치지 않습니다.) Food industry is one of the most huge section in our life. Therefore, it is unrealistic rule for many companies.
To sum up, it is unrealistic rule in someway however, it is serious problem which we have to control because people can be addicted to sugar sugar can be addicted and many of them can’t quit take sugar by themselves. Therefore, it is necessary to make the rule about the consumption consuming of sugar.
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