Today, newspapers and televisions are giving detailed descriptions on crimes. Some people believe such a practice will cause bad consequences and thus media should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Many may think, and I agree, that media should be very careful to broadcast about details of any kinds of crimes, being controlled by strict censorship. First of all, the media is easily accessed by people who are very young and who have no ability to distinguish right from wrong, such as children. They might have an urge to commit similar crime they saw from the media, just for having fun. In this case, it is very certain that detailed information about crime exert a negative influence on them, offering a chance to be a criminal.
Second, allowing people to access too much detail of crimes is enable them to feel insecurity in daily lives. For example, if thieves intruded someone’s house and the media shows how they broke in, the neighborhood of the house would not feel safe anymore, even in the house, because they know thieves have the way to get in their house anytime. Of course there is positive aspect to share detailed information to make people take precautions of the thieves. However, insecurity is very hard to be removed, once it planted in people’s mind. Furthermore, it would cost the government because the government need to protect people from the crimes ever been introduced by the media.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that the media plays important role in people’s lives by sharing information which has power to manipulate desire, behavior and even feelings of the people. Therefore, the censorship of the media especially for the information of crimes should be applied for all information the media would share to the public through any channel.
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시간 : 약 1시간 (시간제한없이 작성해보았습니다.)
목표 : 7.0
-첫문장에서 being controlled 에서 being 을 빼도 될 지 고민을 했습니다. ( 앞의 should be 를 함께 끌어다 써도되는건지.. 어떤게 더 자연스럽나요? )
-people's mind , people's lives 같이 어퍼스트로피를 자유롭게 사용해도되는지 궁금합니다.
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