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12월 에 시험예정이고 목표점수는 7점입니다,
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좀 주제가 어려웠네요 ..ㅠㅠ
감사합니다,.
Many people believe that they retire at the age of 50. It depends on jobs, only a few people remain their jobs until they are 65 or 70. Sometimes, they work up to 80s. It seems that retiring at 50 became practice from one day. It looks that there is an little agreement on an appropriate retirement age.
However, there are no clear agreement on an certain retirement age. Only several jobs using physical abilities are encouraged to retire at certain ages. For example, athletes usually retire at near of 30. They gradually lose their physical abilities after 30, they are not competable any more. This is the reason that they retire earlier than other people. Aside from these several
jobs, people do not need to retire early even though they work normally.
On the other hand, many jobs do not require high level of physical abilities. They do not need to worry about losing their competition. For instance, office workers do not require high level of physical abilities. They spend most of their working hour in front of computers. It does not seem require a lot of labors. However, many companies let them retire when they become 50. Although they can work after than 50, they are often encouraged to leave their workplaces. It is a discrimination for old people without fair reasons.
To conclude, I believe that working as long as people are possible should be encouraged to remain in paid employment if they normally keep their performances physically.