Many companies and some organisations require their employees to wear uniform.
Which jobs is wearing of uniform good for?
What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work?
Employees in many companies and some organisations must wear a uniform. I also agree that people in some particular jobs or industries should be required to wear uniforms due to various reasons. But (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) there are also disadvantages at the same time.
First, people who work in construction sites can be in danger easily. In fact, many people have been injured because they did not follow the requirements of wearing safety equipments such as a helmet. To prevent unexpected accidents, proper outfits would be mandatory. Plus, jobs such as a police officer or firefighters are also needed to wear a special uniform. Police officers are always in the risks of being in serious criminal scenes, and firefighters usually have to face high temperature fire. Thus, they have to wear uniforms that are specially made to protect themselves be protected.
In contrast, there are some disadvantages for wearing a uniform as well. In some countries, students have to wearing uniforms in middle school and high school. Especially, young teenagers usually want to express their individuality. However, I assume forcing them to wear a uniform can be regarded as ignoring their opinions. Also, sometimes Sometimes, the fabric that was used can be inconvenient to wear. For instance, In in South Korea, a The number of students from school complain that they feel too hot in summer time due to the bad quality of their school uniform.
In conclusion, there are some particular jobs that should be required to wear uniform due to the safety. (실제 어떤 직업이 있는지를 요약해주셔야 합니다.) However, there are some disadvantages. Being forced to wear uniform can ignore people’s individualities. Sometimes, it can be inconvenient as well.
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큼지막한 오류가 있지는 않았다는 점은 긍정적입니다. 그러나, wearing이 너무 자주 쓰이는 등의 문제점은 보이는 상태이기 때문에 이에 대한 대처가 필요합니다. 또한 글마다 대소문자 문제가 꼭 두세개는 나오는 상황이므로, 이에 대해서도 신경써주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)