In some
countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.
Why
might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
It is a common
belief that possessing a home rather than renting one is very significant for the public in some countries. In this essay, I will represent the reason about this
argument, and the personal opinion for my belief.
To begin
with, many people believe that their own house is a better way to live compared to
renting a home because people can live without strain about moving house. For
example, when people live in a rented renting house, they always be worry about and perceive to
move other places when they encounter the date of the that end of contract. Also, it
is hard to find the house that they really want, especially, for families with
children because they have to come up with the school which kids should go.
What is more, not only adults but also their children would feel hard to adapt to a new circumstance. As a result, owning a home can affect their emotion and feelings.
However, for
university students or young employees, they do not need to purchase their own
home. Those people have possibility to move other areas because, when students graduate
their college and get a job, they are able to move other cities, so it is difficult
to manage of buy. As for workers, they can also change their workplace and
marry with someone who live in other cities. It also means that they can move
another cites. (여기서 엔터 한번 더 치셔야 하고, 이 문단의 경우 그래서 ~가 긍정적인지 부정적인지를 언급해주셔야 합니다.)
To sum up,
buying people’s own house is vital for their life than renting a home because they
can live regardless of moving house. But I believe that this situation is only
for families with their kids of older parents, so renting house is more useful option
for young generation. This view has both positive and negative situation for
people. (굳이 막 어른, 청년 등을 나눠서 복잡하게 생각하지 마시고, 그냥 [대상의 구분 없이] 긍정적이다 혹은 부정적이다라고 적어주세요!)
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