It is a common belief that the idea of infringing on individual liberty is terrible. However, I firmly believe that people should be violated by the government for the security of society. This is because, it is possible to prevent people from potential dangers and ensure that safety regulations are followed.
To
begin with, intruding upon people's liberty is able to be justified when
protecting people from potential dangers is the main purpose. Given the increase in violation increasing in
violate from the world, measures must be taken to prevent potential attacks,
such as terrorists. For example, in order to protect bombing or the
transportation of dangerous material, airports around the world conduct security
check on people and their luggage. Even though it infringes on one’s freedom, it
is necessary to prevent them from harmful accident. Therefore, the government should
have the rights to implement intruding on people’s freedom to protect their
security.
On top of that, the government is able to violate an individual’s right on freedom to make sure that safety regulations are followed. Some certain jobs can make danger people’s lives when employee do not act safely and responsibly. In this case, it is important to ensure that these employee should follow safety rules and process. For instance, school bus drivers and pilots should have random medical tests. If they will not able to perform their work by their medical problems, they might make dangerous events like traffic accidents. The resaon why this is necessary to prove that these people are not going to hurt other people’s safety
To
sum up, intruding on people’s freedoms is essential if the government is needed are to
protect people's lives from dangers and make sure that individual are
following the necessary rules.
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