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Many students have indeed had excessive pressure from their study ('어린 나이부터' 라는 표현이 핵심입니다.), and
schools and parents only emphasize the importance of success in their education.
While people could have various perspectives, I think that this is negative for
both students and society.
It goes without saying that there is nothing more important than
experience in childhood which is the only one time to get people’s life. Based on
various experiences like playing with the peer group, doing their interested
sports or learning instruments, children could find their aptitude, the way of
solving a problem and their preferences. However (이게 있고 없고는 cohesion/coherence 에서 생각보다 많은 차이를 줍니다.), the The lack of these experiences due to
the severe study, children do not know what they want to be or what they really
like. Since After children become adolescents, they are struggling with a similar
issue struggle with similar issues, they, finally, would grow up only physically matured adults. That is why
more and more individuals who are looking for their professions have
difficulties that on what kind of field they should search, and this has caused
incredible waste of human ability.
Furthermore, the The environment that adults push their children only for their study has
made various psychological problems in society. People who did not keep in
touch with their friends, are dealing with the feeling of isolation, alienation
or loneliness, however, they cannot solve this unstable status because they
have just accumulated the knowledge of their major. They might, extremely, try
to commit suicide be killed by themselves. Also, the juveniles who are bickering with their
parents every day because of their study would bully other pupils to get away
from the pressured situation.
Overall, the overburden of study and the pressure to kids have led to
serious social problems, thus, students should experience more various things,
enjoying their life. ('제언' 은 논제에서 요구된 바가 없는 사항입니다. 종종 수험생들이 범하는 실수이기도 한데, 이 논제에서는 긍정적인지 부정적인지의 여부만 묻고 있으므로 결론에서도 이에 대한 요약만 해주시면 돼요.) |