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When people grow older they need company but young people find it least preferable to spend time with old people. This is why many opine that older people should live separately. Should old men live with young people together in a family, or should they live in the clubs/retirement home for old men?

It is a common belief that elderly people living with young people could have more advantages than who do not. However, I firmly believe that it is even more beneficial for them to live in the retirement home.

First of all, older people can take professional treatment. ('요양원에서' 라는 점이 전제가 되어야겠죠. 항상, 그리고 특히 새로운 문단의 초반에는 지금과 같이 핵심 키워드에 대한 상기가 매우 중요합니다.) As many countries are experiencing an aging society, the silver industry has grown. It means that skillful workers specialized in taking care of elderly people are always staying in the retirement home, providing better care to residents. For example, one of the most important things to keep elderly people healthy is controlling what they eat. Normally, it is hard for non-specialists to analyze ingredients and nutrition for non-specialized people,and family members wouldn’t would not consider of those even if they worry about the elderly people. This fact may lead to a harmful effect on old people’s health and could occur future disease such as diabetes, or obesity.

Moreover, older people living with young family members would feel alone and easily be depressed. That is because they do not have a common subject to talk, as well as lack of time to communicate since younger people normally do not stay at home for a long time. It is better for older people to talk with ones who are in the same age, and to share their time. For example, institutions have some activities, such as table tennis, drawing, and so on. As a result of those activities, elderly people would feel connectivity with others, and thus be satisfied satisfying of their lives.

To sum up, older people living in residents for them could get a specialized care and an emotional advantage. For these reasons, it is important to encourage elderly people to live in the retirement home. 

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내용상 크게 문제되는 없었으나, 본론 첫 번째 문단에서와 같이, 글을 작성할 때에는 항상 문단마다 핵심에 대한 상기가 꾸준히 이어질 수 있도록 해주세요. 또한 자잘한 오류가 종종 보이므로 이와 관련해서 수정해주시면 되겠습니다. 수고하셨습니다 :)