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Q. Raising household electricity fees is the most effective solution to the problems associated with power generation and environmental pollution.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective in reducing the environmental pollution caused by power generation?
It is a common belief that going raising up household electricity fees is the most useful way to the iusses related to power generation and environmental pollution. Nevertheless, I firmly believe that raising fees is not the solution of removing the origin of problems. These issues can be solved by making common use of alternative energy alternative energy be in common.
To begin with, raising electricity fees which are used in the house is not the origin solution of the environmental issues. Nowadays, despite of relatively expensive electricity fees, there are many electricity machines in house such as a washing machine, dishwasher clothes-cleaner, a dish-washing machine, a robot vacume and a microwave which are used by people a lot. Moreover, becoming worse about environmental pollution in the earth, people usually turn on the air condition and radiator in house. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) This is illustrated by the example in Korea, where the amount of electricity usage peaked the highest point last year. In spite of increasing fees, people who live in Korea used numerous amount of electric (명사형으로 쓰셔야 합니다.).
However, there are solutions to this problems. One of the ways to reduce the environmental pollution is to make alternative energy spread commonplace. The energy which can alternate power generation can resolve the orgin issue of environmental pollution. Yet there are few people who use sun-energy in house, the government interfere positively to use sun-energy in common. For instance, in Switzerland, by introducing the alternative energy such as sun-energy and water energy, the environmental pollution has been declined almost 70 percent. (얘는 단순 숫자+고유명사놀이입니다.)
To sum up, going up increasing electricity fees which are used in the house using in house is not the best solutions to solve the problems associated with environmental pollution. These issues can be resolved by spreading alternative energy in common.
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