■ Direction· Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
· Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Many countries are experiencing an increase in numbers of teenage crimes. What do you think is causing this problem? What measures could be taken to reduce them? |
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Your Answer ▼
It is often seen that the teenage crimes in many nations are occurring frequently more and more. There are some reasons why this phenomenon occurs, but and there are also some solutions to tackle the issue. To begin with, there are several factors which result in juvenile delinquency. Firstly, the crime rate of teenager is prevailing problem in modern society and many countries(하나의 이유라기보다는 주장으로 보입니다). In addition, some of their criminal intention are unrespectable reasons and just for their fun because most of them are not able to distinguish between right and wrong. Under a such circumstance, sadly though, most of victims are in danger of losing will to live, and difficult to forget to painful memories. These problems can be caused by some victims in the world, and more and more serious crime and repeated crime. However, there are potential ways to solve the current situation. First of all, this trend is needed to reinforce the law through the global co-operation for rehabilitate rehabilitation of teenage criminals. Each nation’s government should implement sentence and teach severity of the law, such as increasing a community service, to prevent or getting rid of offending this cycle. Moreover, the government have to save many victims by of crime and their terror through strong sentence to help them for integrate in our society. Not only strong law and sentence can give mental ad and emotional support to victim in need, but also helping young crimimal to learn what is moral behaviour is important. These would be the most effective way to decrease the rate of juvenile delinquency. To conclude, although teenage crimes are a serious issue, there are steps which governments can take to solve this problem, and it is important to tackle this matter. |
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채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
Score (9점 만점) | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 |
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두번째 문장에서 청소년 범죄의 원인에는 몇 가지 이유가 있다고 하셨는데 글을 읽어보면 단지 재미로 하는 것 이외의 이유를 찾아볼 수가 없습니다. 이 경우 또래 집단의 영향이라던가 부모로부터의 관심 부족 등 좀 더 다양한 관점에서의 이유를 언급해주시는 것이 보다 적절할 것으로 여겨집니다. 또한 해결방법에 있어 물론 법의 강화라던가 교육의 필요성에 대한 이야기도 해 주셨지만 범죄 피해자에 대한 내용이 이 글의 내용과 굳이 연관성이 있는지는 의문입니다. 수고하셨습니다.