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The illustrated
bar chart outlines the consumption of coffee and tea in three different types
of intake in five main Australian cities. A brief analysis of the chart reveals the
rate of cafegoers is the largest in most of the cities with an exception, Adelaide
which shows buying instant coffee as the highest figure in the last month. Of going to cafés for coffee or tea, its figures generally (여기의 경우 틀림의 문제보다는 어순의 자연스러움 쪽 문제로 보시면 되겠습니다.) depict the highest rate Having fresh coffee is evidently observed as
the least popular choice among Australian residents. Sydney and Melbourne’s
citizens tend to purchase more fresh coffee compare to other cities, both
rates stand for over 40% and it is trailed by that of Hobart, slightly less
than 40%. The figures of Brisbane and Adelaide indicate almost the same, approximately
34%. |
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