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Task 2 첨삭 부탁드려요.
목표는 7점이고 12월 중으로 시험 예정입니다,
40분 정도 걸렸고, 단어는 258자예요.
감사합니다!
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Nowadays numurous students study abroad for university. They go to various countries to earn advantages which cannot be gained in their countries and it will be an exciting prospect for them.
However, some people insist that staying home would be better because of a lot of difficulties students will encounter living and studying in different cultures. First of all, they could undergo financial issues unless their parents support them fully. In addition, they often feel alone and get homesick eventually. They usually spend hard time for first 6 months to getting used to other cultures and languages. Moreover, if they are not prepared enough for the languages, they feel hard to communicating other people even if they want to buy a cup of coffee. (이 문단은 '장점' 관해서 채워주시면 됩니다. 이에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
On the other hand, going to overseas for university study brings many benefits if the international students are well-preapared for the languages. This is because Because they will communicate and will work with other languages. If they are well-prepared for the languages, they could easily get opportunities to work at a foreign enterprise after their universities. Also, they can make a lot of international friends. Having international friends helps them learn and understand other cultures. These aformentioned benefits are great chances to broaden their sights. These sights will be great assets for their entire lives. Therefore, it is worth to going overseas for university study.
In conclusion, I believe that going overseas for universities is an exciting prospect for many people if they are good at using the languages which is used in the country where they want to study.
총평: (5/6/7/7) 6.5
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