It is true that the number of self-employed people is increasing. On the other hand, the number of people who do not want to work
for their company is falling down. With regards to this, this essay will
discuss about this social change.
First of all, I believe the reasons why a
majority of people want to be self-employed is because of the unstable society
and the improvement of technology. Due to COVID19, almost every business is
going through a hard time. However, some companies are an exception such as an IT
company like Google. As technology advances, the accessibility of contents is
getting easier. It can also mean anyone can not only make their own contents
and but also make own money, and this new type of job it is called YouTuber. By watching Watching YouTubers who make
a lot of money, many people are also challenging themselves to become a
YouTuber.
However, making an own business does not
always make a lot of money and it has too many risks. It is because, for
instance, YouTubers earn money according to the number of views, thus it means they
cannot make money if the number of views is low. There is no doubt that making
a YouTube channel does not require money as much as the other businesses do,
but people have to keep in mind the quality of their videos or contents. I strongly
believe, they should invest for the better contents, such as hiring an editor,
equipment, etc. (초록색은 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
In conclusion, being self-employed is not
that easy as much as people think. Nevertheless, if they have a certainty of
it, I suggest that they have to put in into practice now. Before it is too
late.
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Q. 혹시 시험장에서 글을 고칠 때 지우개로 지우고 쓰는 대신 부호를 써도 되나요?? to
EX) i have ^ eat
-> 별로 권장드리지는 않습니다. 위와 같이 to 하나정도까지는 그래도 괜찮은데, 길어지는 경우 그냥 지우개를 추천드려요.
총평: (5/7/6/7) 6.5
최근 들어 초록색 관련해서 문제를 보이는 학생들이 많아지고 있으므로 더더욱 주의해주셔야 합니다. 글을 쓸 때에는 철저히 논제가 요구한 바에 대해서만 집중해주셔야 해요. 논제를 올려주시지는 않았지만(다음부터는 꼭 올려주세요!) 이 논제는 원인과 단점을 묻고 있죠. 그러면 딱 그거에 대해서만 서술해주시면 됩니다. 초록색과 같이 내가 자의적으로 제언을 하는 경우, 월권행위가 됩니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)