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The widening gap between the
rich and the poor is a heavily studied subject between social and economic
experts. Some people contend that the best way to build happier society is to minimize
the gap between its richest and poorest. However, I only partly agree with this
idea with two valid reasons.
First and foremost, a serious
economic inequality between the affluent and the poor could discourage people
without enough money. They are less likely to satisfy with their quality of
lives due to the fact that they should feel under pressure to pay for their
living every day, while others do not hesitate to eat out at fancy restaurant,
paying for more than the monthly rent of the poor. Especially, in today's
society, it is more difficult not to compare one's life with others, since we
have easier access to the information how others live their daily lives due to
the advance and spread of social networking services. It is undeniable that improving
the economic disparity can be an effective way to improve overall happiness in
society.
However, since we live in the
capitalistic world, it is unfair not to respect the results of working hard to
accomplish their financial goals. Sharing the wealth of the rich without any
consideration can lead to serious conflicts in society, as the rich would feel
that they are conversely discriminated. I believe there are certain sectors
that equality between the rich and the poor is needed. For example, uninsured
people who cannot afford medicines and treatments for their illness should
receive appropriate medical care with subsidiaries from the government. Also,
the government should allocate their taxes on supporting poor students, who are
willing to study, to pursue their academic passion by letting them be exempt
from tuition fee or offering them public tutor services, so education can be a
social ladder to move up to upper class. It is clear that imposing high tax
rate on earnings of the rich and indiscriminately distributing the wealth to the
poor will have negative impact on society.
To sum up, settling economic disparity by social
welfare program which experts carefully consider could be the most effective way
for citizens to enjoy happy life.
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