The two charts illustrate the types of jobs for Anthropology students after a graduation (학부 졸업이라고 적어주시는 게 더 정확하긴 합니다.) by six different categories and their salaries after five years’ work.
Overall, it is clearly found that more than half of the total graduates went into have got full-time work while they have worked at part-time work with studying postgrad study as the least. In regards to salaries, the employment for government sector represent the highest salaries.
There is a remarkable rate of students that went into got full-time work slightly more than half of total as 52% followed by part-time employment, 15%, with large gap between them, and 12% of unemployed, accordingly. It is found part-time Part time working and postgrad studying at the same time is found as the fewest rating of them, 5% and 8% of full-time postgrad studying respectively.
On the other hands, Meanwhile, there is the highest salary from government sector, 50% of them have has been paid around more than $100,000, 30% of that from $75,000 to 99,999. In contrast, employees in private companies receive employment has the lowest payment, the largest number, 35% of them were could be paid $50,000 to 74,999 while 30% of them received $100,000+ for 30%.
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