1. 라이팅에서의 목표점수: 6.5
2. 다음시험 날짜 그리고 위의 점수를 아무리 늦어도 언제까지는 만들어야 하는지: 최소 2021년 8월
3. 현재 글을 쓰는데에 몇분이 걸렸는지 + 단어수 + 외부도움: 21 분 + 159단어 + 외부도움X
4. 그 외 제가 알아두면 도움될만한 기타 정보나 현재 학생 여러분들의 공부상황: 영국대학 오퍼를 받았고 아이엘츠 제출을 위해 군대에서 독학중입니다 감사합니다
My answer
The graph below illustrates the frequency of how much many people in the USA had the a/their meal in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. We can immediately see that the answer for once a week accounts for the largest number of responses in 2003 and 2006. Moreover, the proportion of people who ate in fast food restaurants everyday was the lowest figure for 10 years.
First of all, the answer for once a week was the biggest figure between 2003 and 2006 (이거 하나 틀린다고 폭풍감점되는 건 아니지만...그래도 주의해주세요!) 2013. To be more specific, the proportions of people who ate in fast food restaurants once a week were over 27% in each three given years. These figures were larger than any other answers. In addition, there were the smallest number of people who ate in junk food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. (빈도를 언급해주셔야 합니다.) The proportions of eating at fast food restaurants everyday were less than 5% in each three given years. In general people in the USA increasingly avoid eating in junk food restaurants.
총평: (6/7/6/6) 6.5
문법은 틀려도 되고, 틀리는 게 당연하지만, 초록색 표시된 부분들의 경우는 웬만하면 맞춰주셔야 합니다. 당장 저거를 틀린다고 점수가 확 내려가지는 않지만, 저게 누적되면 얘기가 달라지며, 또한 평소에도 저런 실수를 하지 않도록 습관을 들여주셔야 실전에서도 안 틀려요.
수고하셨습니다 :)