2 Lectures were used to be a way to teach large number of students, but with the technology available for education, there is no longer justification for lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
; 수업(강의)은 많은 학생들을 가르치는 방법이었다. 그러나, 기술의 발달(적용)으로 인해 더이상 오프라인 수업이 정당화 되지않는다.
찬성 / 반대?
인트로- 교육방식에 대한 의견 다양함. 난 기술의 발전을 통한 변경된 학습방식에 반대.
반대1- 수업의 중요성. 선생과의 직접적인 교류를 통해 학업 성취도가 향상될수 있다.
반대2- 인터넷 등 기술의 발전을 통해 교육을 받을 수 있는 매개체가 많아졌지만, 검증되지 않은 정보 많음. 학생들에게 혼란 야기 가능성
결론- 기술발전 통한 교육의 방식 변화했지만, 기존의 수업방식이 갖는 장점이 더 많다(주제 반대)
These days, with the advent of technology, a number of changes related to our daily lives have happened. One of the changes was education. Some people think that there is no longer justification for lectures because there are numerous alternatives of previous lectures. On the other hand, there are those who say that teaching a large number of students in the classroom is irreplaceable. I personally believe that changed education ways with new technology can not be replaced with the original education advantages. (만약에 시간 부족하셨으면 서론 위주로 간추려주시면 됩니다.)
First and foremost, a lecture in which a teacher teaches teaching many students in the classroom by teacher can improve academic achievement of students because both students and teachers can communicate directly at the same place, and this way can allow is to allow students to fully concentrate on their study. In contrast However, using changed lectures such as online class at home can lead to loss of concentration of students compared to at classroom. In fact, many parents prefer their children to take the offline lectures to online ones in order to increase academic efficiency of their students.
Moreover, most materials about education come from new technology which is not reliable. There are a number of materials today which students can access information on the Internet as much as they can. This way is very useful and convenient for them, but most (이런 걸로 감점되는 건 아니긴 한데, most까지는 아니라고 봐야죠. Lot 정도가 낫습니다.) information is unreliable, and not confirmed by verified organizations. Therefore, these systems can lead to serious repercussions to students such as delivering wrong knowledge.
In summary, with the advent of technology, education methods also have changed. Even though there is an opinion that argues lectures we have done are no longer justification for lectures. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.) However, I personally believe that teaching a large number of students has more advantages than using changed education system with new technology.
총평: (7/6/7/6) 6.5
제임스님의 경우 한국어 작문 능력이 꽤나 뛰어난 편입니다. 위에 개요로 적어주신 것과, 이전에 적어주신 다른 한국어만 봐도 금방 파악이 가능해요. '아니 모국어니까 당연한 거 아니냐?' 라고 말하실 수도 있지만, 솔직히 말씀드리자면 모국어인데도 작문을 못하는 학생들도 많습니다.
이는 정말 큰 장점이 될 것이며, 이제 여기서 영어 실력만 조금 끌어올려주시면 충분히 6.5-7.0은 안정적으로 확보할 수 있을 거에요. 글에 대한 요령은 제가 그때그때 체크해드릴테니까 제임스님은 어휘+문법을 최대한 끌어올려주세요!
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