There might be contentious debates debated regarding the issue of whether owning a house is more important than renting a house for residents. I agree with the view that buying an own house is good to people. This essay will first discuss the drawbacks of buying a house, and then look at the benefit of owning it.
Many people feel that preference of owning a house has have some negative influences. Firstly, it could be bring about the increase of costs of houses, and for in this reason, many people who want to buy an apartment or a studio, such as couples who get married, can be suffer from this phenomenon. A recent survey by Korea University shows that the cost of apartments rose over rises 60 percent over than the past 2 years before.
In spite of the drawbacks mentioned above, I think that owning a house can be seen very important to people. In general, home makes people feel comfy and cozy. It is very important for people because during the worktime they might have a tough and hard time. After that, when people come back to their home, they might want to get some good feeling throughout their family or own furnitures in house. However, if the house is not theirs, but a rental house, the aforementioned good things might have been reduced. To give more detail, The Chosun Herald also reported that the importance of feeling from their home. Pondering on aforementioned statements, it is more reasonable to take the my view as the established opinion.
To make it conclusion, although a tendency of owning a house could come about some disadvantages, but I think that an own house give more benefits to people whom live in.
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그러나 현재 본론1은 원인에 대해 다루고 있지 않고, 전혀 엉뚱한 '단점' 을 언급하는 중입니다. 오히려 원인은 본론2에 가있는 상황이고요. 굳이 따지자면 순서가 바뀌었다고 보셔도 됩니다. (물론, 단순히 순서만 바꾼다고 해결되는 건 아니지만, 그래도 6.0 선에서는 순서만 바꿔도 괜찮습니다.)
약속의섬님은 지금 task2에서 너무 discuss both 유형에만 갇혀있는 상황입니다. 그러나 라이팅의 논제는 discuss both 말고도 다양하기 때문에, 절대로 하나의 틀에 글을 가두려고 해서는 안 돼요. 그렇지 않을 경우 시험장에서 '제발 discuss both 나와라' 라고 기도해야하는 상황이 발생할 수 있습니다.
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