The given line graph illustrates the percentage
of oil usage in Iceland, Sweden, Italy, and Turkey from 1966 to 2006, at ten-year
intervals.
As an overall trend, it is clear that while
the percentage of turkey (이거 한번 틀린다고 폭풍감점이 되는 건 아니지만, 그래도 주의해주세요!) increased for the given period, remaining countries,
including Iceland, Sweden, and Italy showed a downward trend until 2006. Among
the latter countries, the rate of decrease in Iceland was the largest compared
to the others, which was followed by that of Sweden.
A more detailed look at the line graph reveals
that the total amount of oil (여기는 높은 확률로 문제가 있는데, 표가 없어서 확답을 못 드리겠네요ㅠㅠ) that was used in Turkey was the lowest for the
year 1996, with the figure being nearly 60 percent. However, it is noticeable
that the figure of turkey slowly increased, surpassing that of Italy and
Sweden between 1996 and 1976. I
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Moreover, while the amount of oil that (여기도 아마 문제가 있을 겁니다.) was used in Italy was higher than the oil usage in other countries, with 90 percent in average for the given period, this figure was caught up with Turkey in between 1996 and 2006. After two figures met at around 85 percent, Turkey consumed about 90 percent of oil, ranking first by the year 2006.
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총평: 지금 표가 첨부되지 않은 상황이라 내용상으로 많이 봐드리지 못했습니다. 어휘의 경우 깔끔했고, 문법에서는 '틀린 건' 거의 없지만, the ~ of ~의 구조가 주구장창 쓰이는 게 아쉬웠고요.
제가 마지막 두 문단에 표시해드린 사항과 관해서는 게시판 1페이지 상단에 best글들 중 task1 작성법의 2-2번을 보시면 설명이 되어있습니다. 또한 제가 확실히 말씀드리기 위해서 표가 첨부된 채로 수정해주시고 댓글 주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :)