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It
is true that consumer behavior has changed a lot recently because of the
development of technology. Although there are some disadvantages, I firmly
believe that the change of consumer behavior due to technology brought more
advantages than disadvantages.
The
main effect that technology gave to consumer activities like shopping was the
place where people could buy. In the past many people used a market or mart to
buy products, but recently people consume anywhere even in their house by using an online market. According to recent research, the number of people using online phone
applications related to shopping tripled during the recent 5 years. (얘는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) This shows
that more people tend to use online shopping malls instead of going offline
markets or marts.
In
addition, the change of consumer behavior because of the advance of technology have had more advantages such as promoting the global economy. As technology made
shopping easy and convenient, people may consume a lot, leading to promoting
the global economy. For instance, as people could buy products anywhere by
using online applications comfortably, people would likely to do shopping more
often. Also, as people could easily buy products from other countries by using online
systems, the movement between countries would increase. These show that people’s
change in the way of consuming due to technology has many advantages as it
could make consumers buy products more often, which could lead to the benefit of global
economy.
To
sum up, technology changed the way people consume such as the place where
people do shopping. While there might be some disadvantages, I personally
believe that the advantages of the change of consumer behavior due to
technology outweigh the disadvantages.
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