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The intelligent technology has been drastically developed. Some people find this progress will bring us a bright future while others suspect that the changes occurred by the smart devices may deteriorate our life. There are arising controversies controversy over this topic, so this essay will cover both views on top of my own opinion with relevant examples.
On one hand, many people will enjoy much more convenient life thanks to the smarter technologies. For example, with the wide usage of big data, these days people do not have to wait for the bus at the bus stop for a long time. They simply check the time of which the bus will arrive when the bus arriving, which the app presents and get ready on time.
On the other hand, the more intelligent robots and computers step forward to replace human’s jobs, the more people will lose their valuable workplaces. To be specific, when auto-driving technology has been applied to every single car, people who make their livings as automobile drivers has no choice but to leave their driver’s seat to the computers.
After all thses pros and cons are reviewed, I think that these technologies getting more sophisticated let our life affluent. In my own experience, I can find a faster way on the congested moterway with the help of nevigation on my cell phone which analyzed the road traffic in real time.
All in all, there are positive and negative views on the highly developing intelligent technology. The pro side believes that the growth of the technology regarding big data will lead us convenient life. However, on the con side, they worry about unemployment issues due to the development of intelligent technology. In my own opinion, these smarter devices make our life easier. (지금 글의 구조를 조금 수정해주셔야 하는데, 이에 대해서는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
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