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My answer
In plenty of cultures, children which means people who are not mature usually heard that they are able to accomplish anything if they try hard enough. This message looks like positive, and literally it gives some hope and also it can be a great motivation for children to achieve their goals. However, giving this message is not always good for children because this message might make some side effects when the children grow up.
First of all, plenty of positive effects can be shown through giving this message to the children. This message can play a significant role in making efficient motivation for the children. To be more specific, there are some children who would like to go one of the greatest universities in their countries, they should make a great score on their secondary school or studying hard for taking SAT . If their parents give some hopeful messages like if they try hard enough you would make good scores and finally can go to the university that they want to go, this message will be a good motivation for the children. Eventually, the children's learning speed would be accelerated and they would study harder than before, and this process can be connected to achieve their real goals. This being so, one of the most efficient motivation is giving a hopeful message.
Secondly, there are also some side effects that can be caused by this kind of hopeful message. When children hear the message like this, they feel like that there are nothing that they can accomplish when they do the best. Unfortunately, this kind of optimistic mind can cause tremendous frustration when they grow up and face some impossible works or goals. For instance, the children who want to be like Bill gates, they believe that they can be like him if they study hard or go through variety of experiences. However, it is really hard to become a respectful billionaire because to become billionaires is harder than winning the lottery. Significant point is that if the children who ultimately cannot become the billionaires, they will be suffered by horrible inferiority and depression. Consequently, the hopeful message can also cause negative effect to the children.
In various modern communities, people try to give some good and positive messages like if the children study hard, and they could achieve anything that they dream. The grateful message for children is good and it can be a great motivation for their life. However, this kind of message can arouse pessimistic effect.