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The given bar chart depicts how many people buy or drink coffee and tea in five cities of Australia.
It is crystal-clear that went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks is the most preferable habit for city dwellers whom live in the five cities, apart from Adelaide in which bought instant coffee in last 4 weeks ranked in first place.
In Sydney and Melbourne, the differences between bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks and instant coffee are lower than 10 percent, yet, on the other hand, in the other three cities, the disparities between the two options are greater than 15 percent.
To make a conclusion, went to a cafe for coffee or tea in last 4 weeks has a tendency of showing the highest percentage among three habits, and, meanwhile, bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks shows that it is placed at the lowest in all five cities where the survey was conducted.
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