These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home.
Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?
It is often argued that tasks are easily accessible at worker’s home because of advances in technology. While working at home is considered to be advantageous, it can have numerous negative influences. However, I believe the benefits override the drawbacks.
To begin with, there are two main demerits at working at employee’s place. It is common that a comfortable atmosphere could simply bring laziness and distribution to workers that interrupt their working ability. Secondly, they can disturbed by their family, housemates and pets therefore they would not be able to cannot focus on their task properly. However, these disadvantages could be simply solved when workers concentrate on their tasks and make working atmosphere in their place.
Despite these negative factors, however, there are more merits which can be are considered. First of all, working at home can avoid unnecessary time and energy consumptions by removing commute to work and traveling to attend meetings. Moreover, in terms of saving time saving, it is possible to undertake other tasks while working. To be specific, workers can do house chores, take care of their children and working at the same time. It also provides freedom of schedule scheduled, therefore, they can arrange tasks depending (sopp님의 실력이면 이정도는 맞춰주셔야 합니다.) depends on individual’s situations. Another benefits on working from home is it can provide under-pressured working conditions. It is because they can avoid friction between coworkers and superiors. It is also said that home where is comfortable place encourage employees are able to ease the tension to do tasks which could make them willing to work.
In conclusion, although there are positives and negatives related to working from home, there are more beneficial impacts. Hence, employers should consider working from home to enhance employee's work abilities.
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