안녕하세요, 이클립스 선생님 !
오늘도 첨삭 감사합니다.
즐거운 주말 보내세요 !! :)
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The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of reasons that people in the UK had for visiting art museums in 1990 and 2000. There are five different reasons and others as the categories.
Overall, it is evident that most reasons for visiting art museums increased in each proportion from 1990 to 2000. Besides, the main reason in both years was to learn and gain knowledge, with 44 percent in 1990, and 45 percent (Overview에서는 구체적인 수치가 따로 들어가지 않습니다.) in 2000, respectively.
Looking at the pie charts more closely, one can see that people who went to museums to fill their travel schedules declined from 27 percent in 1990 to 12 percent in 2000. It was the second highest purpose for visiting art museums in 1990, but was overtaken by the reason to attend a special exhibit, 18 percent in 2000. On the other hand, the percentage of to spend time with friends and family showed a slight rise from 12 percent to 18 percent. Lastly, the rate of people who want to buy art and have other purposes concerning visiting art museums were under 10 percent in the total during the two-year period.(words 180)
총평: (6/7/6/6) 6.5
이번 글 괜찮았네요. 사실 제임스님의 경우 원래 글 자체는 잘 써주시는 반면 영어가 살~~짝 아쉬운 상황인데, 지금처럼 영어도 어느정도 깔끔해지면 충분히 6.5도 노려볼 수 있을 겁니다.
대신!!!!!!
절대 여기서 만족해서는 안 됩니다. 제가 6.5를 드리긴 했지만, 냉정히 보면 아직은 6.0 확률이 더 높을 거에요. 고로 어휘+문법 공부는 시험 전날까지 매일매일 꾸준히 해주셔야 해요. 제임스님은 제가 따로 강조드리지 않아도 알아서 잘 하고 계시리라 믿겠습니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)