The bar chart illustrated illustrates the outcomes of a survey of how often people bought and drank buy and drink a different type of coffee and tea in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart of Australia for the past 4 weeks. There are three types of the trend in last 4 weeks that people bought fresh coffee and instant coffee and went to a café for coffee or tea. (항목 나열은 따로 하지 않습니다.)
As an overall trend, the highest type of people’s preference of buying and drinking coffee and tea was to go a café for them except for Adelaide, which showed a slightly more preference in which people bought instant coffee instead.
The type, as people bought fresh coffee in last 4 weeks, showed the lowest portion of the three factors features and Sydney within 5 cities in Australia had the highest result in buying fresh coffee to buy fresh coffee, whereas citizens in Brisbane had the lowest preference of it.
The result of which people bought instant coffee and went to a café for coffee or tea was a lion share of this survey. In Hobart, there are provided the highest percentage of people’s preference was seen in those who bought instant coffee by approximately 54%. The rate of people who feature people went to a café for coffee or team showed a large portion by around 64% in Melbourne which is quite a similar result with Hobart.
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