Some people
think that the best way to run a business is within the family.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?
These days,
a number of self-employers run their business with their family members. Some people
believe that running a business within the family is the best way. In this
essay, I would represent benefits and demerits of the mentioned phenomenon view for my
belief.
To begin
with, the disadvantage of a family run business is that it could cause trouble
with family members and make misunderstandings. This is because they almost always stay
with each other in their home and workplace. For example, one of my friends
runs a café with her family, so she always works her sister and mother all day
long. Therefore, they do not have their free time and their private life, which
leads to gaining under the stress from each other. As a result, this affects mental health each family
members in a negative way their mental health.
Nevertheless,
there are several advantages in the family business. Firstly, they can trust
each member, so they are able to feel comfortable even when they manage their financial
tasks or confidential problems. What is more, most employees usually do their
work properly, and they do not care significantly care their tasks. This is because
those people just need a safe workplace and payment their safety workplace and their payment, while the family
members try to make an effort and deal with all tasks. Hence, the family members
can help more than normal workers.
To sum
up, although people could be think uncomfortable and do not have freedom, which is
the setbacks, however running a business with the family members is the best
method (여기는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) because their members can trust each other and they always try
themselves best.
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