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| Nowadays, it is sometimes observed that people must attend schools until they become 18 years old. I strongly agree with this statement as I believe that schools are the best places for students to develop themselves.
One the one hand, some people believe that it is unnecessary for students to stay in schools until they reach 18 years old. First and foremost, distance learning systems are everywhere. If someone move into different country, he/she could take courses not only whenever he/she wants but also wherever he/she lives. Secondly, some students are likely to need to learn vocational training. To become a artist like professional singer or dancer, they have to take practical lessons. In addition, their academic achievement would be lower than other students. Thus, studying in school makes them feel time-consuming. (이 문단은 '18세까지 학교에 있어야 한다~' 라는 내용, 즉 밑의 문단에 대한 또다른 근거로 채워주시면 됩니다. 이에 대해서는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.)
On the other hand, I firmly believe that there are several reasons why some adolescents prefer (~를 선호하고 자시고는 중요하지 않습니다. 봉다리님의 의견만 적어주시면 되기 때문에, 그냥 '18세까지 학교에 있어야 하는 이유는~' 이라고 적으시면 돼요.) to attend schools until they reach the age of 18. One of the reasons is that some youngsters could develop their social skills by ineracting with both teachers and classmates. In school life, if some student is faced with some problems, it is better to solve them together than alone. Another reason is that some young people would like to find a decent job. To become a lawyer or doctor, they have to study hard up to a certain level. With a higher levels of degree, it seems to be easy for them to get closer a desired career.
In conclusion, although some people think that it is unnecessary to that stay in schools until they become 18 years old, I am of the opinion that school is the best place in many ways. Therefore, students should be encouraged to attend school. (학교에 다니는 걸 권장하는 게 아니라, 학교에 18세까지는 있어야 한다고 적어주시면 됩니다.)
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