Some people think that the effective way to reduce pollution is to tax the companies which cause it. Others think that there are better ways to achieve this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In modern society, it has been a center of the heated discussions regarding that who has a responsibility of the pollution. Some people say that the companies should pay more tax because they cause it while others think that there are other better ways to deal with the pollution. I think this issues can be resolved by the individuals as well as the government.
On the one hand, the big portions of pollution such as water and air pollution are caused by the factories. If the government imports heavy taxes on those companies, the government can use them to reduce pollution such as developing eco-friendly facilities that the citizens can enjoy. For example, in Korea, the government charges a tax to companies where that cause a serious pollution and the government use that money to build parks in the center of the cities and clean the river to reduce the water pollution.
On the other hand, some people suggest that there are better ways to reduce the pollution in terms of the individuals and the government. As the huge part of the pollution is an excessive usage of plastic, the government promotes a campaign to reduce the consumption of plastic and chemical products. In fact, many countries take advantages of this plan of reducing plastic consumption. Moreover, individuals can reduce pollution in their own ways. For example, people can carry their own bags when they go to the supermarkets (비닐봉지를 사용하는 대신~이라고 적어주시면 좋습니다.). For these efforts, it is These efforts are effective ways to reduce the pollution.
To sum up, all of the part of the society have to do their best to reduce pollution and it has there are many ways to achieve this. However, the government and individuals can give a big help to make a better environment as reducing plastic usage.
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