Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Both and your opinion.
There are divergent opinions regarding the issue of what the main environmental problem is in our time. Some people believe losing species of animals and plants should be addressed before anything while others strongly disagree with this idea, saying that other major environmental issues must be understood before considering extinction of any species. Although both arguments are contentious, I personally believe there are more essential issues that need to be resolved first.
To begin with, when the environmental issue is viewed from the perspective of people who are concerned about the food chain, it is possible to suggest that extinction of certain species is a substantial danger that it has to be removed immediately. It is undeniable that every living creature has its purpose either as an essential part of a food chain or contribution to improvement of human life. For example, bees are one of the most vital insects to not only the nature but also humans because their activities involve helping plants to grow and these greens supply food to people. (그러나 만약에 벌이 멸종하면~~~~~으로 결정타를 쳐주시면 됩니다.) This clearly explains why extinction of some species is a great threat so that it should be addressed before other environmental issues.
However, to say that the extinction of species is the main problem, there are too many other major threats that need to be addressed by the whole world as soon as possible. This is due to the fact that the problem of losing certain species on earth (여기는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) is often directly related to other issues such as excessive plastic use. This is illustrated by one recent study conducted in the United States. What the researchers have discovered was that due to human activity of using plastic excessively, many animals are suffering to survive in the wild as these garbages also invade the homes of the animals. They even sometimes confuse plastic bags as their prey, and this often results in damages to their organs which causes death. As a result, it is clear that compared to other environmental issues such as excessive usage of plastic, extinction cannot be considered as the main issue yet.
To conclude, although the environmental problem of losing species is a serious problem, I personally believe that other issues such as excessive plastic use should be mentioned before that as the consequences of using too much plastic is a significant threat to not only humans but animals as well.
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이번 글도 잘 써주셨습니다. 딱히 말씀드릴 사항은 없을 것 같고, earth 관련해서만 밑의 설명을 참고해주세요!
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+다음에는 task1,2 따로 올려주시면 감사하겠습니다. 공지 쓸 때 시간을 계산해야해서요ㅠㅠ
++실제 시험에서는 저 문단 구분할 때 동그란 점 없이 그냥 써주시면 됩니다.
오늘은 'Earth' 의 대소문자 관해서 다뤄볼 겁니다.
Earth 는 고유명사가 될 수도, 보통명사가 될 수도 있습니다. 이때, 경우에 따라 전자는 대문자 시작, 후자는 소문자 시작해주셔야하고요.
Earth 가 태양계의 세 번째 행성인 '지구' 를 의미할 때에는 대문자 시작해주시면 됩니다. 가령, Looking at our planet Earth from outer space was an unforgettable experience. 라는 문장에서는 지구라는 의미로 작성되었으므로 대문자로 시작하는 것이죠.
반면 대지, 땅에 대해서 얘기할 때에는 소문자 시작입니다. 예를 들어, By digging the earth for about an hour, we were finally able to find the treasure. 라는 문장에서는 땅이라는 의미로 쓰였기 때문에 소문자 시작인 것이죠.
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