Many women
complete scientific graduate programs, but only few pursue in technology or
science. Why is so? What are the measures to resolve this problem?
These days, many women work at scientific
fields than before, but only few pursue in technology or science (만약에 패러프레이징하기 어려우시면 그냥 논제를 그대로 베껴쓰세요~어차피 최저 6점만 받으시면 되니까 패러프레이징이 그렇게 중요하지도 않습니다.) it still is small number. As times change, people start to
have interest about this phenomenon. Women pursue various career fields
compared to the past. There are various
reasons for this, but I firmly believe that people should think about social
phenomenon and structure. In this essay, I will elaborate its causes and solutions.
One of the reasons of this
phenomenon is continuous research and experiments. If women want personal events
such as marriage, childbirth, they need to leave of absence and anyhow, they
get to break off of their career. The field of science requires people to should keep research and
publish the essay about the result of experiments, but those personal events
make them stop and could not pursue those anymore. Moreover, actually the
number of men man is greater than that of women. Therefore, of course, many men
consist of a lot of important position. It may be burdensome for women to
enter.
To confront
this issue, the government should play a role in encouraging women to enter
those fields actively. The government should come up with various policies so
that women can soely focus on their projects or study in science. There should be
benefits for women not to be afraid of coming back after those events. Also,
extent percent should be allowed to hire women.
In conclusion, people’s personal events
are inevitable and women might give up their major or field. In order to pursue
science field, the government should implement diverse policies to assist women
before it becomes a becoming more serious issue.
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목표 : 6~6.5
너무 어려웠네요 이 주제는..
이 과학분야만의 이유가 안 떠오르네요..ㅠㅠ
매번 감사합니다 :)
총평: (6/6/7/6) 6.5
아무리 못해도 6.0은 받는 글이니까 너무 걱정하실 건 없습니다. 대신, 쓸데없이 서론에서 시간낭비 하지 마시고 본론(2)를 보완하는데에 더 신경써주세요.
또한 '내용' '이유' '근거' 등이 떠오르지 않을 때에는 무조건 모범답안을 정리하시면 됩니다. 대략 이러한 내용을 쓸 수 있겠구나~만 정리해놓으셔도 실전에서 이 주제가 출제되었을 때 큰 도움이 될 거에요.
수고하셨습니다 :)