■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼
Today more and more tourists are visiting
places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the
Antarctic.
What are the benefits and disadvantages for
tourists who visit such places? |
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Your Answer ▼
I visited the Sahara desert three years
ago. I acknowledged there were various and many tourists who want to visit more
difficult places at that time. This trend has continued until now. The tourists
going to hard places has increased more and more.
There are various benefits from these
trends. First of all, the economy in poor countries can grow up because of
travel industries. There are some surveys that the increasing number of people
visiting Sahara desert give a significant role in Egypt’s economic growth. (얘는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) Without these tourists touring to desert, a lot of people in Egypt could suffer from depression.
Secondly, visiting severe places encourage
young people to challenge something difficult in their life. In my case, I had a really serious experience in the dessert. There was no water, and I was in danger as well as being
dangerous from the snake which has an even poison. It was too cold to stay at
night in tent on the desert. But (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 않습니다.) those experience always make me not to give up
something difficult in my college and company.
But unfortunately, there are also
environment issues as a lot of tourists visit the place where people have not
been well. Especially, the plastic bag which has been spread by tourists have remained for over
three hundred years, and this has been a big social issue issues in Tibet which has the Everest
mountain.
For this reason, I firmly believe that the
governments which have a splendid place for tourists make a strong policy
against environment problem. They have to make tourists to concern about the
rubbish taken. I insist that the environmental issues are more important than tourist’s
special experience. (얘는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: 6.0/9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | 5/9 | 6/9 | 6/9 | 6/9 |
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Comment ▼ 6.0이야 어찌저찌 받는 글이지만, 한 가지는 체크해주셔야 합니다. 글을 쓸 때에는 철저히 논제가 요구한 바에 대해서만 적어주셔야 합니다. 지금 논제는 ~의 장단점이 뭔지를 묻고 있죠. 그러면 글 내내 그 장단점에 대해서만 적어주시면 됩니다. 그러나 지금 결론에서와 같이 그걸 넘어서 스스로 제언을 하게 될 경우 월권행위가 되니까 주의해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :) |
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