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In our society, there has been an argument on that which is the best choice between imported agricultural products and domestic products. It is not a simple issue, however I firmly believe that consuming domestic food is better to citizens.
To start with, agricultural food that grown within the country is usually good to our body health. Farms, forests and food factories are not far from our cities, therefore it doesn't (줄임말은 풀어써주세요!) take long time to be delivered delivery in market places. In this reason, there is no need to add exessive artificial anti-aging products which are harmful to human body as well. Moreover, pruchasing domestic food products dedicates to growing national economy. If one consumes domestic food rather than imported food, it can help many farmers and food factories to produce more quality products. It can reinforce the agricultural industry more stronger than before (reinforce랑 중복입니다.), making lots of national wealth.
Although I concede that imported food products can be much competitive in terms of price policy. (얘는 불완전한 문장입니다. 한국어로 바꿔보시면 금방 아실 거에요. 완전한 문장으로 바꾸고 댓글로 검사받으세요!) Usually imported products are much cheaper, however, in these days citizens do not want just cheap products. What they are really interested in is healthy food, as we can see so called 'well-being syndrom'. Consumers are putting a priority to health over prices, as long as health products are reasonably priced. (이렇게 쓰시면 오히려 앞의 파란색을 부정하게 됩니다. 즉, 수입제품의 장점을 강조하는 역할을 수행해야하는 이 문단이 제 역할을 하지 못하게 돼요.)
In conclusion, domestic agricultural products have advantages in terms of body health and national economy. Even though its prices can be higher than imported ones, citizens had better choose domestic agriculture food. 안녕하세요. 49분 01초, 단어수는 242입니다.
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