Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? |
Most people think teaching children a
foreign language at primary school has negative effects in entire education.
However, I firmly believe that children
should learn a foreign language as soon as possible so that can know how much the
world is wide.
Some people think teaching students other
languages early makes them confused before they obtain perfectly their first language
makes them confused before they obtain perfectly their first language. Some
students would not want to learn other languages so it could bring adversely
effects to education environment and individual’s achievement. Most people can
have a negative sight to something when they do works without their intention.
Nonetheless, there are some advantages (무엇에 대한 장점인지를 다시 한번 상기시켜주셔야 합니다.) ,
first of all, languages are obtained as much as you are younger. If you (2인칭은 구어에 속하므로, 적어도 아이엘츠 라이팅을 쓸 때 따로 쓰지 않는다고 보시면 됩니다.) think a
foreign language is necessary for students and think teach them at secondary
school, it is more beneficial to teach at primary school. It is important for
students to understand that there are many different kind of ways for
communication, so they could have a wide range of understanding abilities ability with other
people throughout these recognitions. Early foreign languages education can find
students who are talented with or interested in languages and they can dream a job related to languages and nowadays most field are engaged in languages it means
that they will be able to have enormous opportunities in the future. (여기부터는 끊어가세요~)
To sum up, early education of something has
negative aspects and it is inevitable. But (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) it is clear that the advantages of
foreign language education at primary school outweigh the disadvantaged disadvantages of this.
총평: (6/6/6/6) 6.0
핵심에 대한 꾸준한 상기는 글쓰기에 있어 언어를 가리지 않고 매우 중요한 덕목 중 하나입니다. 따라서 지금 본론 두 번째 문단의 경우도, 그냥 장점이라고 하는 게 아니라 '초기 외국어 교육의 장점' 으로 명확히서술해주세요~
수고하셨습니다 :)