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Task 1 – 26 page
This graft is about the registration of each vehicle on a decade on decade basis.
Every population percentage of vehicle registration was shown to be has been shown below 50%. And (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.) the rate of the truck was top except the 1980s.
Interestingly, the taxi and the bus shows a similarity, in which their registration rate rose and decreased to raise and decrease until the 2000s.
After the 2000s registration of the taxi increased rapidly, and the rate reaches above double.
The rate of bus has been decreased consistently since the 1980s and the registration of the 2010s was get worse than the 1970s.
The registration of the trucks decreased heavily from the 1970s to the 1980s and hit a bottom of itself, after the 1980s, increase gradually until the latest but still didn’t (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) reach the highest point of itself.
In the 1970s truck started at 45%, the taxi was 25%, and the rate of the bus was is only 5% and the 1980s, the truck and the taxi were switched their position, therefore the taxi was 35%, the truck was 30%, the bus has increased slightly and reached 15%.
In the 1990s, the taxi and the truck switched again, besides, the taxi decreased rapidly, the truck showed more than 30% but the taxi showed approximately 20% and it went goes down again in the 2000s, only about 15% was registered which was the lowest point of the taxi but also the highest point of the bus registration on the 1980s.
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