The diagrams compare two different layouts of offices, of which one can be used by a maximum of eight people, compared to the other accommodating a maximum of ten people.
Overall, it is clear that, (쉼표를 남발하는 것은 별로 좋지 않습니다.) in Room A, 8 desks are split into two rows on the left and right sides of the room, while all of the 10 desks are on the left side of the room in Room B. with fitting two more people than Room A
Looking at the diagram of Room A closely, one can see that there is a huge table in the center of Room A and 4 desks are on left and right side of table each. A coffee machine is located below the table. Bookshelves are in front of the entrance on the opposite side of the coffee machine.
On the other hand, in room B, a coffee machine is located in front of the entrance and bookshelves are on the right side of the room. A table is next to the bookshelves making room for 10 desks on the left side of the room. (일단 들어가야 할 건 다 들어가긴 했는데, 구조는 바꿔주시는 게 낫습니다. 이에 대해서는 밑에서 말씀드릴게요.)
[181 단어 / 6.5 / 16~17분]
항상 감사합니다 :)
총평: (6/6/7/7) 6.5
일단 어휘+문법이 깔끔해서 6.5 받는데에는 아무 문제 없는 글이긴 한데, 구조의 수정을 해주시면 7.0도 괜찮을 겁니다. 마지막 두 문단에서 단순히 각 방의 정보를 나열하기보다는 해당 문단들을 하나로 합치고 대응하는 특성들끼리 비교해주시면 더 확실한 분석이 될 수 있어요.
수고하셨습니다 :)