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In this present age, an argument about the value of extended family has sparked much debate. Some people arrert that extended family type is not important anymore, whereas other people argue that it is still beneficial to family members. Personally, I am in favor of the first view.
To begin with, as society grows bigger and bigger, facilities which is imperative in our daily lives have been scattered many places within the whole country. Therefore living family members together in one place is not realistic. For example, workplaces like factories, education infra such as universities and hospitals are located in a variety of different places. Thus, in this condition, each family members should decide where to live on there personal situations, in accordance with individual life plans.
Moreover, advanced IT devices now help them to connect other family members even in a far distance. It enables family members to communicate each other very effectively. In other words, physical distances is not a problem at all. For instance, yougn family members living in many seperate places can keep a strong emotianal attachment between their parents if they reguraly uses IT services like Facebook, Zoom.
Admittedly, if family members live altogether, they can get help other members easily. But today many lavor-based services are now provided socially. Take an example of infants education system. In the past, parents should look after their children within extended family, but now it is common for regional goverment or companies to run daycare facilities.
In conclusion, in these days facilities which is crucial to each members' life-cycle are already scattered in the whole country, and family attachments can be still alive thanks to IT devices. Therefore keeping extended family type is not so important as before.
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