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In modern society, computer games have been considered a major sports around the world. The parents Parents assume that it has less importance important in terms of learning and guess it will have a harmful effect on teenagers. I partly agree with this perspective. To begin with, while the technology and game market is growing, there are also many negative aspects of games. The games that students face are suggestive and violent, and in addition, many bad words are used in the game such as Battlegrounds or Battle Ground, GTA. They are exposed the games easily in a huge game market and they can’t (줄임말은 풀어써주셔야 합니다.) filter the game out. In fact, research results showed that people who were exposed to violent games or videos were noticeably more aggressive in reality. (얘는 밑에서 말씀드리겠습니다.) Therefore, the games cannot have educational effect and it It can harm children’s emotional development. Especially, especially for adolescents. On the other hand, not all the games that children encounter are violent. By playing appropriate games, they can get rid of stress from their studies most easily and simply and it It can be a function of entertainment for them. Furthermore, playing computer game can lead to developing interest to in game developer and computer-related fields. Due to doing this, it It may also be possible to find talented people that will lead to the development of IT industry in the future. Depending on how they use it, it can be an advantage or a disadvantage. Computer games may offer a limited range of intellectual benefits but they also cause lack of physical activities and mental development. In my opinion, they should control themselves for their studies, or parents have to limit their children.
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